Poem a Day Challenge #9

Hi Class! Welcome to day 9 of our poetry challenge. I revised my ocean poem from yesterday so I wanted to share it with you! What do you think about the changes I made? As a poet, revision is a critical part. I hope that you are spending time thoughtfully revising your poem as well. 🙂

Make sure to include the link to your post for today’s challenge in the comments section! 🙂

The Ocean

The ocean swaggers into the shore.

In and out.

In and out.

She tiptoes on tiny feet and freshly built sand castles.

She runs over shattered seashells and slimy seaweed.

In and out.

In and out.

She sprints back home and doesn’t look back.

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16 responses to “Poem a Day Challenge #9

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  2. Wowy wow wow!!!!!It’s really descriptive!!!!!

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  4. I see that you repeated the “in and out” it flows very nicely!

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    Cloud! What do you think cloud looks like and is??? Try to see my poem and see if your answer is right!!

    The poem is really specific!!!

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